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I've painted you quite roughly dear

                But never fear      

                I'm here to clarify                                

                So help me die      

                A little longer                                        

                Live a little stronger

                Sweet semper fi

  

                You know it’s such dessert

                Such pleasure when you hurt.

                You're S & M

                You little gem

                Upon your whim

                I'll struggle blindly

                Untie the nots

                While shooting shots

                Of wretched carpe diem



                I’ll find the way

                To drink the day,

                To be your prey,

                To let you play

                Upon me dear,

                A tool for truth

                To cut your tooth

                And hang your nails upon

  

               Sharpened, honed

               With blood and bone

               Carved upon and set in stone

               A guidepost standing crucified

               Until you give me leave to die.
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This is my 2nd submission for the Magical Muse Contest, entered of course, by the skin of my teeth. [link]

VetchVespers is a PROCRASTINATOR.

This poem refers in its first line to ANOTHER poem I wrote to my muse, just 'cause sometimes I do that kind of thing :crazy:. Unfortunately, I could not enter that one in the contest, as it was not written FOR the contest. :rage:

I'll post the link to it when my DA page isn't being RETARDED, which it is right now, but you can find it if you really care. It's called "Muse." Craaaaaaaazy.....

Ed: Aha! [link] There ya go. :)
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~VetchVespers Jul 2, 2009  Student General Artist
Sado masochistic? The idea that there is a pleasure in understanding the truth, even when it brings pain. The muse causes anguish, but gives truth, and thereby ecstasy.

You're comment about the Latin is a VERY good point. And one I had not thought of, blast it. I'm not sure if I can change it though. I'll have to look into it. See if I can work it in without being clunky. Thanks.

I think it's interesting. I wrote two poems for the Muse contest. This one, and one that's much more light and fluffy. I think this one's a hell of a lot better, but the other got more attention. People don't like that suffering. ;)
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~DarkAngelFleck Jul 3, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Ya, the first think I thought of was BDSM and then I was like, eh Idk, i'd rather just ask. BDSM is great :D
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~VetchVespers Jul 5, 2009  Student General Artist
Asking's a good way to find out. ;)

It is certainly interesting. Do you like the artist Brom?
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~DarkAngelFleck Jul 8, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Not sure if I do, sounds familiar, but can't think of anything.
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~VetchVespers Jul 29, 2009  Student General Artist
One of my favorite fantasy artists. He's got a lot copy cats these days. Of course, DA's got some pretty awesome people in its own right.

[link]
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~DarkAngelFleck Jul 30, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Oh I've seen his art before when I was into warhammer lol. I like it alot.
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~DarkAngelFleck Jul 2, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
I enjoyed reading this poem. I love how you tie the two verses up with SImper fi, then carpe diem. S & M? wasn't too sure what you were aiming at with that, might just be oblivious. When you ended the third stanza with upon, it kind of threw me off. I was getting in a mode of expecting latin and a rhyme, but then it was neither. Just distracted me.
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~VetchVespers Jul 2, 2009  Student General Artist
Shit. :doh: I'm an idiot. I commented on myself instead of replying to you. See below.
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Original and unusual, nut not sure I'd wanna meet you in a dark alley! Fun to read. :)
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~VetchVespers Jul 1, 2009  Student General Artist
Aw. And you haven't even seen a picture. ;)
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